Thanks Nonoy. I’m currently writing chapter seven, so I will be posting 5 more fairly shortly. Your comment is very encouraging and I appreciate it. Thanks.
This first chapter reminds me of the opening scene in Haruki Murakami’s The Wind-Up Bird Chronicle. If you don’t know the book, you should check it out. It’s not a graphic novel, but a super interesting read.
Love what you have here so far! I’ll stay tuned for the rest. I’m a bit of a graphic novel junkie.
On some panels it’s not clear who is talking. At first I find it confusing but realised it doesn’t really matter since the A-B dialogue keeps the flow going. I like that one one part it shows how the guy “Mr. Fish” is imagining the girl and him talking face to face instead of just over the phone. Were the vague panels at the beginning a preparation for this part?
Another thing I like, are the pasted word balloons – keeps the traditional sketchbook feel of the whole comics intact.
Thank you very much. This comment is very helpful. There is an intentional “mystery” behind the dialogue, but I don’t want to create story stopping confusion. Thanks again, David
This is very interesting. I’m curious to see how this strange woman develops with Mr. Fish. Seems very odd how she knows who he is. I wonder if he will get other strange calls 😉
Double Trouble: a graphic novel.
nonoymanga said,
March 19, 2012 at 9:41 pm
Gripping, intriguing, it’s like some kind of a classic noir mystery. I love this stuff. Well done Nonoy Manga
davidrhales said,
March 19, 2012 at 9:44 pm
Thanks Nonoy. I’m currently writing chapter seven, so I will be posting 5 more fairly shortly. Your comment is very encouraging and I appreciate it. Thanks.
nonoymanga said,
March 19, 2012 at 9:47 pm
Can’t hardly wait……
meagan mac said,
March 20, 2012 at 12:23 am
This first chapter reminds me of the opening scene in Haruki Murakami’s The Wind-Up Bird Chronicle. If you don’t know the book, you should check it out. It’s not a graphic novel, but a super interesting read.
Love what you have here so far! I’ll stay tuned for the rest. I’m a bit of a graphic novel junkie.
davidrhales said,
March 20, 2012 at 8:34 am
Thanks Meagan! Its a great book; that part gave me the courage to develop my story that starts with a similar experience. Thanks again.
deadendemily said,
March 20, 2012 at 2:35 pm
I really love this, the artwork is fantastic and I like the playful and sexual implication behind ‘the phone call’, can’t wait to see more.
davidrhales said,
March 20, 2012 at 7:07 pm
Thank you Emily, I really appreciate your kind comment. I hope to post chapter two: the lawsuit, real soon.
pguzmanos said,
March 22, 2012 at 10:41 am
Hi David,
On some panels it’s not clear who is talking. At first I find it confusing but realised it doesn’t really matter since the A-B dialogue keeps the flow going. I like that one one part it shows how the guy “Mr. Fish” is imagining the girl and him talking face to face instead of just over the phone. Were the vague panels at the beginning a preparation for this part?
Another thing I like, are the pasted word balloons – keeps the traditional sketchbook feel of the whole comics intact.
It’s a good read!
davidrhales said,
March 22, 2012 at 11:46 am
Thank you very much. This comment is very helpful. There is an intentional “mystery” behind the dialogue, but I don’t want to create story stopping confusion. Thanks again, David
P. Graham said,
March 25, 2012 at 12:29 pm
This is very interesting. I’m curious to see how this strange woman develops with Mr. Fish. Seems very odd how she knows who he is. I wonder if he will get other strange calls 😉
davidrhales said,
March 25, 2012 at 2:27 pm
Thanks for taking the time to read! There will be more soon.
simonreadbooks said,
March 27, 2012 at 10:28 pm
Awesome . . . love the dark atmosphere and mysterious story! The artwork really underscores the mood.
davidrhales said,
March 27, 2012 at 10:31 pm
thanks so much for the encouragement!
davidrhales said,
March 27, 2012 at 10:43 pm
Thanks a million!
Pinkjumpers said,
April 5, 2012 at 11:40 am
REALLY good!
Your drawings create such a unique tone and atmosphere-
Full of mystery and edge :3
Great!
Especially as you are a Dylan fan 😉
davidrhales said,
April 5, 2012 at 11:49 am
Thank you very much! Your comments are very encouraging.
coolforcats retro said,
April 6, 2012 at 8:34 am
Nice work! I’m hooked!
davidrhales said,
April 6, 2012 at 11:07 am
Thanks for reading cool, more to follow soon!
mathematicallyconfused said,
April 6, 2012 at 4:36 pm
This is really great. I love the way you draw shadows.
davidrhales said,
April 6, 2012 at 5:07 pm
Thanks a million Math. I just published chapter 4, so if you have a chance, please take a look. Thanks again, David
thefibitz said,
April 16, 2012 at 9:30 pm
I like it!
davidrhales said,
April 17, 2012 at 9:59 am
Thanks